Intoxication NEW
Colours abound
Thoughts amble
Through a wild haze
Of uncertainty.
I'm stiff
Yet fluid
In movement
As my instability
Begins to surface.
Garbled conversations
Are all I make
On subjects
That make no sense.
It's been a wild night
Where I stagger
Home to face up
To what I've experienced.
I've been dancing
To a different sound
To anything
I've known before.
My head slowly begins
To clear.
This is where fantasy
And reality
Clash as my memory
Returns.
It will take
Several hours however
For me to begin
Making complete sense again.
My body warms,
I begin to shift
Back to civilisation.
I can see the faces
Of girls I've danced with
Their smiles
Warm me
As I reflect
Upon the past few hours.
Intoxication has left me
For now.
Although sober
My head still full
Of great times
I will recapture
Once again!
(c) NZ 2009.
Comments
Love the lack of clarity in
Love the lack of clarity in this piece. you take the reader on a foggy journey through your night out where is is not clear and not what it seems. I like it being open to interpretation on behalf of the reader. It does leave me wishing for you to fill in the gaps and-cleverly, I guess that was your intention.
Although unclear in events it is clear you had a good time.
Thank you for your kind comments on 'Too Much, Too Young' and 'Off-Peak' Im happy you feel its catchy. Take care. Look forward to reading more of your work too.
Intoxication
Hi Mulberry,
Thanks once again for your feedback! It's great to hear from you! As always, any feedback is warmly appreciated! Lack of clarity after a boozy night is exactly what I was aiming for and we've all been there to a greater or lesser extent, haven't we?
Thanks again.
Take care,
Nadeem
Intoxication NEW
This poem, although a "brand new" piece, was originally put together whilst sat in the Ford Maddox Brown pub on Oxford Road on 17 June 2009, immediately after a performance I did at Central Library whilst relaxing with Akinyemi Oludulele. The inspiration came from one of Akinyemi's abstract paintings, which he'd brought along with him. He actually set me a challenge by asking me to look at the painting and try and write whatever inspired me. I have since fleshed this out as the original version was only about 7 lines long and had the title "Psychedelic Trip", which I believed was a bit too obvious in nature. Hence the reason why I have made it a little more abstract and left it more open to the reader's interpretation. However, there are still some obvious points in it which are deliberate, because what I'm actually trying to do is not leave the reader completely lost, as the word "intoxication" is actually a lot wider in context than most people realise.
All comments, as usual, greatly appreciated!
N