Him
Wed, 30/11/2011 - 10:00 — Melanie Duncan
Only he
Has the Capacity
To transform
My darker days
His kiss
Releases a thousand butterflies
He is someone
That I both like
And Admire
His personality just shines
Humility, his sweet nector
Oozes from him
Just like the honesty
That is obvious to me
I am who he makes me
I admit this
Because it is what I always required
Experience has taught me to be cautious
But he is infectious
And I have caught him
Happiness spreads through me
I look forward
To every moment we share
As he penetrates my icy exterior
He is the making of me
Melanie Duncan (c)
Comments
Him
I love this exploration of the power that one person has to transform the life of another in a relationship; the examples given are wonderful - like "his kiss releases a thousand butterflies", "humility, his sweet nectar" and the like, wonderful!
You could perhaps give some more examples with some clearer imagery, so that we can obtain a better picture of the person you are describing - his facial expressions, hairstyle, mannerisms etc, but apart from that, this piece is great!
Nadeem
I and he and his work
I and he and his work colleagues disagree. If I was describing him in detail then those things would already be there but as it was a snapshot... it works