Deep
Thu, 26/02/2009 - 21:02 — Melanie Duncan
I didn’t want to look into my eyes
And see my own fear
Of rejection
I didn’t want to feel
Sometimes I am afraid of the way that I feel
The pain of looking into my own eyes
And seeing something that I would have to give a voice to
When it is not my voice that created the pain but
I allowed someone to make me feel a deep sadness
By taking from me what should have been left
They had the choice to ensure that I was feeling better than when they came
And they chose to take the joy I had shared with them all for themselves
And leave me with nothing
No explanation, no justification
Just took what I had and walked away and gave what they took from me to someone
Who didn’t want them either
Comments
Melanie, I like this piece
Melanie, I like this piece and find that its easy to relate to, im sure many people do too.
you highlight well the loss and rejection and the stolen emotions leaving you bare.
Well done!
Take care.
I really like this
I really enjoyed reading this deep piece, really pulled you into what you was saying :)
keep up the good work
Take care x
Deep
Hi Melanie,
It's really nice, this poem! I love the sense of vulnerability you've factored in here as it seems very empathetic and easy to relate to but you've managed to do this, in my view, in a very original way.
Beautiful!
Well done!